i love this one, and the begining was very good. I thin k the ending could be stronger though, but very good =)
Company was very good but i think messed up bad was soso i see what your getting at and if you find a few different words and ways to rephrase a few sentences i think that one would be great id love to read it after you revise it though
i really hope you keep up with this i love reading you things, i hope you your doing okay, i guess writing helps somewhat as an outlet