Patrick: I think you captured your reality. The poem needs stronger words in the first two sections. Maybe you could have the second section match the density of the final section in length. Write more about the emotions that placed you where you now reside. Write about your childhood..good or ...
Patrick: Your writing walking the track" is special. I am familiar with prison life. Many of your insights on this ritual are new to me. You might want to consider a second draft of this writing. People both inside and outside the prison could find value in it. Keep writing. ...
Patrick: I would like to send you a package but regulations seem to indicate this is not possible. If I sent you funds, would it all be taken for restitution? I would like to get you some new typing supplies. I guess I could mail you 200 sheets of paper. ...
Patrick: Your childhood was unfair. What are your memories of your parents? Your sister? Your older brothers? Were you too young to even remember them or why you were pulled away from them? I am impressed with how self-reliant you became at such a young age. Was summer camp fun? ...
My life has been out of balance too. I am sorry that I have been out of touch. I will try to write tomorrow. I am working on sending you a gift. More soon... I promise. Grace
Patrick: I am going to send a letter tomorrow but the service that I used to send you funds indicates that you cannot get mail. I hope you get my gift of funds and my letter. If not and only this blog gets to you, know that I am trying. ...
Thanks for writing! I finished the transcription for your post. I never liked The Elements of Style. Actually, I think it is overly formal for any current writings. A recent newspaper article spoke of the demise of WHOM...no one uses this word anymore. Please keep practicing. Stop being your own ...
Patrick: I am aware of the difficult deck of cards God dealt you. I am impressed with how you maintain an attitude of gratitude. You are giving special and unique gifts to the world. I sincerely doubt that I would have remained as resilient as you have in the face ...
Patrick: I did not want this writing to end. I will send you a couple comments on areas that I needed more details. Somethings are hard for me to imagine. I LOVE your descriptions. Thank you for sharing this with the world.