Dec. 1, 2012

Wounded Man

by Leonard Jackson (author's profile)

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"WOunded MAN"

YOU CAME FROM MY RIB-ONUCLEIC ACID
LEAVING ME WOUNDED FROM BIRTH.
SUSTAINING YOU WITH MY RADIANCE,
SO YOU MUST BE MY EARTH.
MOST BEAUTIFUL THING THAT I EVER SEEN,
HOW COULD YOU HAVE COME FROM ME.
IT IS NOT GOOD FOR MAN TO BE ALONE,
93,000,000 MILES AWAY SHEDDING A TEAR
FOR EACH INCH, WAITING FOR SOMEONE TO
GIVE ME A PINCH,
SO I CAN AWAKE MY BEING AWAY FROM YOU.
HELL IS THE ABSENCE OF LOVE, LIVING THE SAME DAY
OVER, FOREVER.
MY TRUTHS HIDE IN YOUR SMILE,
CAUSING ME TO LIVE A LIE WHEN YOU SAID BYE.
OR DID YOU JUST TURN AWAY TO DRIFT INTO THE VOIDS
OF MY SOLAR SYSTEM.
I CALL YOUR NAME AS MY VOICE TRAVELS AT 1,120 ft.
PER SECOND.
ALTHOUGH I LONG FOR THE TASTE OF YOUR EARLOBE
THE NAPE OF YOUR NECK-EACH FRECKLE ON YOUR FACE
THE OBSTACLE THAT OBSTRUCT OUR EMBRACE IS ONLY
AN ILLUSION.
RESTRICTIONS OF OUR OWN INHIBITIONS.
LIFE IS TO TAKE HOLD OF NOW, FOR WHO KNOWS WHERE
WE WILL BE TOMORROW.
WILL THE SUN SHINE
WILL I BE ABLE TO CALL YOU MINE
WILL YOU GAZE TO THE STARS FOR A SIGN.
MY TRUTHS HIDE IN YOUR SMILE,
AWAITING YOUR BYE TO SAY HI.

by Leonard Jackson

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candleships Posted 6 years, 11 months ago. ✓ Mailed 6 years, 11 months ago   Favorite
I am absolutely stunned after reading your poem WOunded MAN.
It is an incredible poem. It really, truly is.
The title drew me in instantly, and the numbers mixed in with the flowing poetry kept me reading.

Anything that starts with a mention of our DNA deserves praise, especially when it is found in a piece of poetry. And that conveniently-placed hyphen referencing, if I'm not mistaken, the Biblical story of Adam's rib. In one phrase, you have managed to sum up all of science and religion. That can only be a sign of a truly talented writer.

The most resonant line, I found, was:
"Hell is the absence of love, living the same day / Over, forever."
Hopefully this letter from a perfect stranger will be a tiny break from the hell of that "same day". It's only paper, but we humans try to capture the wonder of the universe & the wonder of our imaginations on paper. Who knows if it will make a difference in the end. But it makes us feel better in the now. And that is really what should count, isn't it?

My only advice would be to keep writing, it would be a wondrous thing if any of your other poems were half as good.

---CBB (candleships)

Leonard Jackson Posted 6 years, 9 months ago.   Favorite
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jhnstam5 Posted 6 years, 5 months ago. ✓ Mailed 6 years, 5 months ago   Favorite
can you still hear my tranquil whispers spoken within your ear
can you recite those words of passion addressed to you my dear.
since we disengaged did your feeling die
or have they been buried another lovers high
am i still present in the depts of your dreams am i seen clearly like the real vivid scenes

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