Nov. 4, 2013

Crime as Punishment

by Carlos Brown (author's profile)


Crime as Punishment

Jaywalk razors slow
Bleeding black pearls of life's ink
False friends become foes

Kisses forgotten
A home coming outdated
Revisit my name

Length mocks width mocks height
Solitary confinement
Crime as punishment.

--Carlos "Sundiata" Brown

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swongx0 Posted 10 years, 5 months ago. ✓ Mailed 10 years, 5 months ago   Favorite
Thanks for writing! I finished the transcription for your post. I thought this was a wonderful poem and I know you've put a lot of feeling and emotion into this poem. I wish you well!

Teacher77 Posted 10 years, 1 month ago. ✓ Mailed 10 years ago   Favorite
I am a high school English teacher and my seniors are writing argumentative pieces regarding the American prison system. I have been searching for poems about the lives of prisoners and came across this site. I wanted to let you know that I think your writing emotionally connects to the reader and that my seniors will be reading your poem in English class. The first line "Jaywalk razors" really caught my attention and I love the metaphor. Nice work and keep it up!

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