Consider using more figurative language to make story truly come alive. There is a literary technique, "show, don't tell" that is useful.
Ex. "...exhausted from the task of fervently spanking his own posterior, the inmate soon fell into a deep slumber now assaulting all within earshot with his stupor-induced snoring."
Tim – I'm working on a letter to you. I will try to contact his sister within the next few days. I enjoyed reading this entry .... I wonder what would happen if our lawmakers in Massachusetts we're faced with legislation requiring state to organize and execute a task force made up of local citizens, obtained in very much the same way they obtain jurors, and these groups would go in unannounced to every single prison facility and conduct inspections. Accountability cant be achieved without The involvement of the very citizens that are affected by recidivism.
" Thiscould be u someday. Is this how you want to experience it?"
Free speech warrior here's the favor you asked for. Rajan sonik 40 court st suite 800 Boston ma 02108 I hope that all is well my friend I'm looking forward to the rado show on Jan 5th let the bullets fly on the doc
You will have this message only on the 9th of January. This I can read here.I sent you a letter from Indonesia. I hope you got it? I had a wonderful voyage in group in that marvelous country! How nice people are here. They greet you with their hands folded across their heart.Always smile too. Just everybody greets you. We saw 3 islands of the 33,000!!Sumatra,(very poor!),Java the ex-colony of the Netherlands, and Bali.In the latter are many tourists. Well, we thought that the population is not that pure in manners as the 2 other islands, because of that.We had a very busy shedule visiting various and interesting areas of this society!So many miles in the small bus. 2 Dutch speaking very good guides also.I took lots of pictures. Precious landscapes: rice fields,plantations, temples,the jungle with the reddish uran utans, makaks, these are other monkey species etc... We stayed at most two days in yet a different hotel, also in lodges.We had a group of 8 people, but my friends (Veerle, read 'Varle', and her fiancé, Scott, an American chiropractor) who invited me to go to Indonesia, parted after 1 day in Bali and took 7 days more on that precious island.They took a surfing course there.Both are 53.They live in Holland, she is a Belgian.Now I listen to my Bali cds. Such lovely sounds! :))I gave 3 neighbors of my apartment, batik textiles; these are typical for this country.Also I bought a batik painting, abstract. It has 20 colors!Clothing for Lynn and Lars, the 2 youngest grandchildren.And a dress and a sarong for me as well. I loved their massages and one scrub with chocolate and milk afterwards.:))
Maybe this note comes first? Before the letter? So,tell me.
Henri, hope all goes well with you. Take care and receive warm greetings from me, Rita
I forgot this:if George would be free, I would consider to move to there. Maybe he never will be able to come to Europe... Leslie was born in the States (Utah) and their family is happy there (in CA), so, they decided to stay there.They feel better than in Belgium.
I'd like to wish you yet a new year of little 'great' things: calling you daughter, your mom and talking with friends out of prison and maybe here and there nice people at yours.Watching a tv- program that nurtures you, listening to music that gives you a good feeling inside, reading a good book perhaps?Writing to friends who are interested in what you have to tell us.Making an interesting drawing,or writing a good poem. Robert,I am glad you will get the money soon.And it will be used for a good case. :)Would you know that I sent it on your B-day? I only noticed it later.November 30th Right? Were you able to do something special that particular day?I will send another 20 dollars for this month, ok? George became free on December 15th; at least he celebrated Christmas out of segregation.:)He was there for six months!... His friends cared to give him some coffee, etc. He's doing good. Bless his soul.:))) He now looks out to buy himself an PM3 player to download music, he didn't hear for ages.He adores music!I will visit him in April. I hope by then they don't move him another time.(...) They stole some things.He has a nice cellie: an ex- military.He complained in an article (his dad sent me one as well)about his oval diet tray. Things noted items down, but they never received them.Or all over again and again. :( I came home from Indonesia on December 30th.Indonesia is a very nice country.People are so nice, always smiling and greeting you with their hands across their breast. Folded together.Such a nice gesture.We've seen Sumatra (very poor!), next the island of Java, ex- colony of the Dutch and with a ship we went to the 3rd island, Bali. Indonesia has 33,000 islands!We were with 8 people in a group; with a Dutch organization, NRV.And had a very busy schedule!Two Dutch couples,two singles, Dagmar(she lives in Portugal) and me and the couple that invited me: Veerle,(read 'Varle') my BE friend and her fiancé, Scott, an American chiropractor. They both live in Holland.She came to ARG when I lived there and we went to Brasil.We also hiked, as pilgrims to Compostela, in Spain.I did in 10 days 200 km, but she did 800 km till Compostela.We saw a lot! And visited many areas. We drove so many miles by bus(a small one). Also we saw uran utans!The most intelligent monkeys.They were befreed and trained to be into the wild again. They still kept the link with humans.:) In some restaurants they eat cats or dogs. (!)
Receive a big hug from Rita! All the best,Robert. Ciau!
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Ex. "...exhausted from the task of fervently spanking his own posterior, the inmate soon fell into a deep slumber now assaulting all within earshot with his stupor-induced snoring."
" Thiscould be u someday. Is this how you want to experience it?"
Love you lots...
Rajan sonik 40 court st suite 800 Boston ma 02108
I hope that all is well my friend I'm looking forward to the rado show on Jan 5th let the bullets fly on the doc
You will have this message only on the 9th of January. This I can read here.I sent you a letter from Indonesia. I hope you got it?
I had a wonderful voyage in group in that marvelous country! How nice people are here. They greet you with their hands folded across their heart.Always smile too. Just everybody greets you. We saw 3 islands of the 33,000!!Sumatra,(very poor!),Java the ex-colony of the Netherlands, and Bali.In the latter are many tourists. Well, we thought that the population is not that pure in manners as the 2 other islands, because of that.We had a very busy shedule visiting various and interesting areas of this society!So many miles in the small bus. 2 Dutch speaking very good guides also.I took lots of pictures. Precious landscapes: rice fields,plantations, temples,the jungle with the reddish uran utans, makaks, these are other monkey species etc...
We stayed at most two days in yet a different hotel, also in lodges.We had a group of 8 people, but my friends (Veerle, read 'Varle', and her fiancé, Scott, an American chiropractor) who invited me to go to Indonesia, parted after 1 day in Bali and took 7 days more on that precious island.They took a surfing course there.Both are 53.They live in Holland, she is a Belgian.Now I listen to my Bali cds. Such lovely sounds! :))I gave 3 neighbors of my apartment, batik textiles; these are typical for this country.Also I bought a batik painting, abstract. It has 20 colors!Clothing for Lynn and Lars, the 2 youngest grandchildren.And a dress and a sarong for me as well.
I loved their massages and one scrub with chocolate and milk afterwards.:))
Maybe this note comes first? Before the letter? So,tell me.
Henri, hope all goes well with you. Take care and receive warm greetings from me, Rita
Leslie was born in the States (Utah) and their family is happy there (in CA), so, they decided to stay there.They feel better than in Belgium.
Blessings and friendship from Rita :)))
I'd like to wish you yet a new year of little 'great' things: calling you daughter, your mom and talking with friends out of prison and maybe here and there nice people at yours.Watching a tv- program that nurtures you, listening to music that gives you a good feeling inside, reading a good book perhaps?Writing to friends who are interested in what you have to tell us.Making an interesting drawing,or writing a good poem.
Robert,I am glad you will get the money soon.And it will be used for a good case. :)Would you know that I sent it on your B-day? I only noticed it later.November 30th Right? Were you able to do something special that particular day?I will send another 20 dollars for this month, ok?
George became free on December 15th; at least he celebrated Christmas out of segregation.:)He was there for six months!... His friends cared to give him some coffee, etc. He's doing good. Bless his soul.:)))
He now looks out to buy himself an PM3 player to download music, he didn't hear for ages.He adores music!I will visit him in April. I hope by then they don't move him another time.(...)
They stole some things.He has a nice cellie: an ex- military.He complained in an article (his dad sent me one as well)about his oval diet tray. Things noted items down, but they never received them.Or all over again and again. :(
I came home from Indonesia on December 30th.Indonesia is a very nice country.People are so nice, always smiling and greeting you with their hands across their breast. Folded together.Such a nice gesture.We've seen Sumatra (very poor!), next the island of Java, ex- colony of the Dutch and with a ship we went to the 3rd island, Bali. Indonesia has 33,000 islands!We were with 8 people in a group; with a Dutch organization, NRV.And had a very busy schedule!Two Dutch couples,two singles, Dagmar(she lives in Portugal) and me and the couple that invited me: Veerle,(read 'Varle') my BE friend and her fiancé, Scott, an American chiropractor. They both live in Holland.She came to ARG when I lived there and we went to Brasil.We also hiked, as pilgrims to Compostela, in Spain.I did in 10 days 200 km, but she did 800 km till Compostela.We saw a lot! And visited many areas. We drove so many miles by bus(a small one).
Also we saw uran utans!The most intelligent monkeys.They were befreed and trained to be into the wild again. They still kept the link with humans.:)
In some restaurants they eat cats or dogs. (!)
Receive a big hug from Rita! All the best,Robert. Ciau!